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Okay, so I recently came up with what seems to me a pretty interesting story focused mainly around Scrooge. It is, however, a quite dark story considering it is supposed to be a Disney comic and I don't know if I should proceed with it, since I'm not sure if a plot like that would work.
Here's the general outline of the story: Scrooge is faced with a series of terrorizing attacks against him, in the form of shop thefts mainly, yet surpisingly none of them are focused on the Money Bin. Scrooge and his nephews immediately suspect the Beagle Boys as the culprits. Although what catches their attention is the way the thefts are carried out: everything seems very thoroughly planned, yet the culprit intentionally lets himself be find out, short after the robbery is carried out, yet always escapes. Eventually, the culprits warn Scrooge that they will go after the Money Bin for their final plan. Scrooge and his nephews, however, are prepared to fight back, and so they do. The culprits, who are indeed the Beagle Boys, are easily repeled and captured, to everyone's surpise, judging by how they were never even close to being caught during the previous crimes. It is then revealed by one of the Beagle Boys that they weren't the ones planning all the crimes, and that the mastermind let them get caught. The mastermind, however, is already in the Money Bin, most probably already where all the money is being held. Scrooge rushes to the money, in fear of the criminal getting away with it. There, he encounters the mysterious figure, who turns out to be a teen-aged boy, leaving Scrooge in awe. Shortly, the boy makes his hatred towards Scrooge obvious, and through a short flashback we learn about how he and his people were driven away from their village by Scrooge's building company (or sth like that) when he was just a kid. What he's after though, surprisingly isn't to steal Scrooge's money to restore his village, but to destroy every bit of it, to show him "how it feels like to lose everything you love".
I haven't figured out the ending yet, but it's going to include an attempt from Scrooge to redeem himself, or something along those lines. I might try to make it less dark though, since it doesn't seem much Disney-ish. However, I want all the intensity and the emotions to stay there. Let me know what you think about it and feel free to leave suggestions. This is my first story and I've put a lot of thought into it, so don't be too harsh on me.

I think it's actually a very interesting idea with something wicked Scrooge did in the past coming back to hount him... however unlike "Voodoo Hoodoo" it's much more personal here which ads a lot more emotional impact.
It all depends on execution but the idea sound great here :)

If You want to see a trully dark and twisted Scrooge story check out my fan fic :)

http://panmilus.blogspot.com/2012/08/niesamowite-przygdy-wujka-sknerusa-in.html

Wow, I really didn't expect people to like my story, especially as I hadn't given it much thought when I made the post! It's the first time after years of reading Disney stories that I attempt to create my very own one, including my favourite character. The positive feedback gives me motivation to work harder on it!

The reason I thought it would come off as a dark story is because of all the tension, emotions and twists it involves, something that is not all that common in Disney comics. I want it to be something that all readers would enjoy, especially those who appreciate mystery, well thought-out villains and suspense in a story.

As for the ending, I think I've figured out something (many thanks to Dutch Duckfan Down Under for giving me the general idea), which adds even more to the emotional impact of the story.

Again, all feedback is much appreciated, it really, really is a big boost to beginner like me. Thanks a lot!!
(Oh, and Mr. M, I'll make sure to give your fanfic a read later, thanks for posting it)